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Out of the Rain

Contributed by on 20/03/10

Sheets of rain come crashing down, shattering against the asphalt.  We need a place to squat, wait out the storm. When your blood courses cold, each drop pierces to the bone.  Liquid shots of frozen lightning.

Freddie’s webbed feet slap-splash in pools of chaos.  I try to keep up.  Brother Jack would break my tail for following a tree frog, notoriously unreliable sons-of-bitches that they are, but this is no time for pride of low-lying beasts.  Chameleon, tree frog…  We are brethren, refugees of a world devolving beyond our livability.  Besides, Freddie knows the way.  I can always ditch him later.

For now, he leads.  He has the plan.

“There’s a hole in the side of this human shelter, about two clicks northwest of here,”  he told me.  “We’ll squeeze in, find ourselves a hot spot and some grub– ride it out in comfort.”

I’m about ready to start kicking myself in the ass for listening, when lo and behold, I see the shelter.  And the hole.  Sweet, glorious hole.

We squeeze through, just as he said, and on the other side it’s a whole other world.  We enter into what I guess to be the main chamber.  A warm, dry, golden paradise… that just doesn’t feel right.  There is this sickening stillness, absolutely no wind whatsoever.  As if there were no air.  It’s awful and I feel vaguely sick.

And the sounds– strange, unsettling noises emanating from the other chambers.

All I can think is “danger.”

Freddie’s bulbous eyes dart opposite directions around the room, as we move along the outer edge.  Now that we’re in, we have no idea what the fuck we’re doing.

Scanning lookout, I catch a flash of green and I turn my eye toward it.  A Dragon.  Exotic beauty trapped under glass.  Danger is replaced by poetry.

Warmed by false suns

she lies in perfect stillness

Igniting fierce fires

fueling savior urges

I will shatter her prison walls

With only my beating heart

I charge.

Then, within steps of her cage, I stop.  Fires out and heart broken.  I am looking at her, but she is looking right through me.  One look into her empty eyes is all I need to know.  She is gone, and I am leaving.  I want nothing more to do with this place.  I want out.

I hear Freddie before I see the cat.  High pitched chirps sound the alarm only seconds before the furry bastard pounces, giving me just seconds to scramble. I skid-slide on the high gloss floor, his claws clicking rapidly behind me.  In blind panic, I climb the first vertical element in my path.  Once I’ve reached the plateau, I haven’t a clue where I am, but it seems safe enough.  I’ve lost Freddie.  The cat is far below, hissing and swiping at the air, before bolting for some other chamber of the shelter.

Stretched out in front of me is an expanse of smooth, shaved wood.  Two cool white disks sit at either end, surrounded by slender metal objects.  There’s an object on one of the disks that smells something like food.  Suddenly, I’m starving.  I move in for a closer look, just as I hear the feline’s return. And he’s brought someone with him.  A Human.  Shit.

The human is holding some sort of grey box to his head.  A gun?  I’ve heard of them, but never seen one.

I can’t breathe.

I turn to flee, but am frozen somewhere between fear and instinct, paralyzed as my body tries desperately to blend with the surroundings.  Futility.  Dammit, I don’t do white. Camouflage is impossible in this unnatural place.

A flash of pure light fills the world from behind me, and in this moment I am dead.  The world goes dark.

Except it doesn’t and I’m not.  Somehow, I’m alive, and so I run like hell from this place–hoping to stay that way.

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15 comments so far

  1. Whoa, I never knew elephants had internet access. This is amazing :)

    Great post though!

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  2. This IS amazing.

    I would love to read an entire book of this guy’s travels. I love his sense of humor and how even in the face of danger, he’s still fucking hilarious, “Futility. Dammit, I don’t do white. Camouflage is impossible in this unnatural place.”

    Well done, Brin, well done

    xo

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    You did set the bar awfully high– I couldn’t get yours out of my head. In fact, I came thisclose to writing from the lizard in you story’s point of view, but wasn’t sure if that would be kind of cheating…

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    We like high-bar-setting around here!

    I had a similar thought about building on somebody else’s piece during one of my first weeks. I was assured that there were Elephant Word precedents for building on what someone else has written. I have yet to do it, but it does seem like a cool idea.

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    (How am I just now seeing this?)

    First, the idea that you would think I set any bar for you to worry about, is incredibly flattering, if I might bit insane ;)…but…I would of course never mind your doing such a thing.

    And I stand by my previous statement…I would love to hear more about this lizard’s travels. Perhaps another photo will spark him?

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  3. Solid.
    Great flavours, simmered and served up delicious.

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    I love how you use the names of my favourite characters when you go incognito. ;)

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  4. I loved this Brina. Confidently told and lots of wry-smiling clues and reveals. Though I really should have, I didn’t see the ending coming and as always, enjoyed being caught out by it.

    Shame about Freddie, I’m not sure whether I should have cared more about him (because I really didn’t!) but I was very glad that our chameleon made it through.

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    Almost forgot – the early phases of this really got to me as some kind of post-apocalyptic world. The rain-storm was so much more than just that, and that threw me a little. I wasn’t expecting to find humans in the human shelter – you never described it as deserted but for some reason, that’s where my mind went.

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    I kind of picture it as a post apocalyptic world for them, in a way. As we thrive, their world is disappearing, dying. I didn’t actually get into that as much as I had originally intended, so it’s awesome you still felt it.

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    Must have been in there somewhere!

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    It was, because I felt it too…it reminded me a bit of …what in the hell was that movie (it wasn’t very good) Ember? And a tad of 9…except of course, we’re the bad guys.

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  5. Hah! Lovely!

    I probably shouldn’t admit this out loud, but there’s always a tiny bit of nervousness on my part when somebody new debuts at this site. Even when you’ve seen their writing elsewhere, it’s hard to be sure how a writer will take to the peculiar challenge EW sets.

    So far, I’ve never been disappointed, but this week has been a bit of a double-whammy for new writers who slip into the format seemingly effortlessly.

    Lovely work, ma’am!

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  6. I love. Love. Love.

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  7. I have a weakness for talking-animal tales, or, stories told from the POV of an animal dealing with those hairless apes that cause so much damage and trouble.

    I love your phrases and descriptive language:

    “Liquid shots of frozen lightning,” for example. And the description of what must be a curtain rod, or valance box above a window. The box the human is holding to his head, is that a phone?

    I like the way you bring back the lightning imagery at the end, again, in the flash of pure light. The reader can think that either the human was indeed holding a gun, and has shot himiself, or, like George — I tend to think that “flash of pure light” was the BIG ONE, the end, either atomic war or an asteroid hitting — I tend to see the latter. The lizards will survive, as they did the last few BIG ONES, including the one that hit 65-million years ago and killed off the dinosaurs, also kings of their world at the time.

    A lot of heavy concepts, implied in a neat little tale of a chameleon trying to survive. Good job!

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