Comments on: Displacement http://elephantwords.co.uk/2010/03/12/displacement/ One Image, Six Writers, Daily Words. The site about Interpretation, Inspiration and Improvisation. Thu, 24 May 2012 07:53:48 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.2 By: Paty Cockrum http://elephantwords.co.uk/2010/03/12/displacement/#comment-24233 Paty Cockrum Sat, 20 Mar 2010 16:17:43 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=3729#comment-24233 OMG!!! Couldn't take my eyes off this one.Glad Ronnie the creep got his just deserts ... and the ending was a reall kicker. You start writing longer stories and you are gonna give Stephen King a real run for the money! I stillhave goose bumps from this one. Great job for those of us who love good horror literature. In all of your dark stories, youhave a fine sense of pacing and depth. In a few short paragraphs, you reach deep into us and grab that in us which identifies with your main character... and takes us along in a gut wrenching ride with them. In this one, every girl with a teasing, bastardly brother will recognize the scenerio... or one in their own memory like it...Then you twist... and it becomes something above reality. Yeah... I wanted that little bastard Ronnie to get his! I actually cheered that little bastard's demise cuz he is the kind who grows up to kill women ... not dolls. But what happened to Perl was a shocker and really put the frosting on a true horror tale... BRAVO, Rivka. I mean it... Stephen King better watch his back if you keep writing great stuff like this! You get better with each story. You know how to reach in and grab the guts... and yank! Horror or dark stories are so much harder to write than other types of literature... The pacing of them is so critical... and this is hard to do for most writers. You've nailed it! This one is a masterpiece of short story writing! WOW!!!Kindly give the horror fans more of this quality work!I love it!!! OMG!!!
Couldn’t take my eyes off this one.Glad Ronnie the creep got his just deserts … and the ending was a reall kicker.
You start writing longer stories and you are gonna give Stephen King a real run for the money!
I stillhave goose bumps from this one. Great job for those of us who love good horror literature.
In all of your dark stories, youhave a fine sense of pacing and depth. In a few short paragraphs, you reach deep into us and grab that in us which identifies with your main character… and takes us along in a gut wrenching ride with them.
In this one, every girl with a teasing, bastardly brother will recognize the scenerio… or one in their own memory like it…Then you twist… and it becomes something above reality. Yeah… I wanted that little bastard Ronnie to get his! I actually cheered that little bastard’s demise cuz he is the kind who grows up to kill women … not dolls. But what happened to Perl was a shocker and really put the frosting on a true horror tale…
BRAVO, Rivka. I mean it… Stephen King better watch his back if you keep writing great stuff like this! You get better with each story. You know how to reach in and grab the guts… and yank! Horror or dark stories are so much harder to write than other types of literature… The pacing of them is so critical… and this is hard to do for most writers. You’ve nailed it!
This one is a masterpiece of short story writing!
WOW!!!Kindly give the horror fans more of this quality work!I love it!!!

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