Comments on: after the breakup, option #7 http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/10/12/after-the-breakup-option-7/ One Image, Six Writers, Daily Words. The site about Interpretation, Inspiration and Improvisation. Fri, 10 Feb 2012 04:24:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Andrew Cheverton http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/10/12/after-the-breakup-option-7/#comment-19797 Andrew Cheverton Sun, 18 Oct 2009 17:02:13 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=2856#comment-19797 This is nicely done, the dialogue speaking volumes. They say a picture paints a thousand words, but sometimes a story's dialogue (or, as here, a story composed entirely of dialogue) can say more than prose could in the space. This is nicely done, the dialogue speaking volumes. They say a picture paints a thousand words, but sometimes a story’s dialogue (or, as here, a story composed entirely of dialogue) can say more than prose could in the space.

]]> By: dan lester http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/10/12/after-the-breakup-option-7/#comment-19700 dan lester Wed, 14 Oct 2009 10:21:18 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=2856#comment-19700 I have no bubble. I have no bubble.

]]> By: Rivka Jacobs http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/10/12/after-the-breakup-option-7/#comment-19649 Rivka Jacobs Mon, 12 Oct 2009 22:24:52 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=2856#comment-19649 Your stories read like mini-plays, Cyn. Excellent dialogue, but also a story folded into the dialogue, unfolded very subtly. Here is the old "can't we be just friends" routine, usually the euphemism for "breakup" which you tell us immediately in the title. The girl is, in a sense, negotiating with the guy, teaching him something, but he doesn't quite get it. There's no gender attached to these roles, though. It could be either the male or the female who does the "Let's be friends" schtick. In this story, it's the guy, but she is handling his unreliability with finesse. I like that you used the word "bubble" instead of space, or shield, or something else. A bubble is such a fragile thing, that can be broken. Or, ones dreams can be burst like a bubble. Again, your writing is so good, your choice of words perfect. Another fine story. Your stories read like mini-plays, Cyn. Excellent dialogue, but also a story folded into the dialogue, unfolded very subtly. Here is the old “can’t we be just friends” routine, usually the euphemism for “breakup” which you tell us immediately in the title. The girl is, in a sense, negotiating with the guy, teaching him something, but he doesn’t quite get it.

There’s no gender attached to these roles, though. It could be either the male or the female who does the “Let’s be friends” schtick. In this story, it’s the guy, but she is handling his unreliability with finesse.

I like that you used the word “bubble” instead of space, or shield, or something else. A bubble is such a fragile thing, that can be broken. Or, ones dreams can be burst like a bubble.

Again, your writing is so good, your choice of words perfect. Another fine story.

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