http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/04/08/broken-wings/ One Image, Six Writers, Daily Words. The site about Interpretation, Inspiration and Improvisation. Fri, 10 Feb 2012 04:24:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/04/08/broken-wings/#comment-14570 Nicolas Papaconstantinou Tue, 05 May 2009 13:29:37 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=1746#comment-14570 Very richly written piece, Ian... nice work! Very richly written piece, Ian… nice work!

]]> http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/04/08/broken-wings/#comment-13678 Rivka Wed, 08 Apr 2009 19:36:26 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=1746#comment-13678 Oh, sorry! I didn't see that it was "the other half of her heart" which you clearly say. Nicely done. Still is symbolic of moving from self-destructive behavior and hopelessness, to renewed hope and healing, but now I see more that this is a mutual renewal, not just the narrator's personal vision. Oh, sorry! I didn’t see that it was “the other half of her heart” which you clearly say. Nicely done. Still is symbolic of moving from self-destructive behavior and hopelessness, to renewed hope and healing, but now I see more that this is a mutual renewal, not just the narrator’s personal vision.

]]> http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/04/08/broken-wings/#comment-13677 iansharman Wed, 08 Apr 2009 19:20:45 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=1746#comment-13677 Thank you, although he does leave the missing half of his heart with her, the heart that's in his pocket is hers. And, yes, it is quite personal. Thank you, although he does leave the missing half of his heart with her, the heart that’s in his pocket is hers. And, yes, it is quite personal.

]]> http://elephantwords.co.uk/2009/04/08/broken-wings/#comment-13673 Rivka Wed, 08 Apr 2009 18:34:14 +0000 http://elephantwords.co.uk/?p=1746#comment-13673 A good example of an internal monologue. (As opposed to "stream of consciousness" which is more loosely constructed and usually not adequate as a stand-alone story.) But this is a personal, internal monologue with the narrator as main character, and it is well done. This is very personal for you, I think. I like the idea that although the girl returns the narrator's missing half of his heart, he doesn't leave it with her, but rather puts it in his own pocket. Indicating a kind of growth and maturing of the narrator, who is presumably still physically at home. A kind of psychological growth from self-destructive behavior to hope and healing. A good example of an internal monologue. (As opposed to “stream of consciousness” which is more loosely constructed and usually not adequate as a stand-alone story.) But this is a personal, internal monologue with the narrator as main character, and it is well done. This is very personal for you, I think. I like the idea that although the girl returns the narrator’s missing half of his heart, he doesn’t leave it with her, but rather puts it in his own pocket. Indicating a kind of growth and maturing of the narrator, who is presumably still physically at home. A kind of psychological growth from self-destructive behavior to hope and healing.

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