Comments on: Scary Girl in the Shop

By: Nicolas Papaconstantinou

Nicolas Papaconstantinou — Wed, 28 Jan 2009 15:36:11 +0000

The voices here are perfect, David, and I loved how the story unfolded, and the hint of sadness at the end.

The ghost, in that way that ghosts in Japanese horror movies start out – sits in the corner and is ambiguous, and the sadness comes not from her, but from the loss of the effect she has.

The acting is so perfect here that I could see it almost as a short animation or film, done in that modern documentary style, with just a tiny bit of stretching. Can almost hear the backing music it’d use as I think of it!

By: georgelondon

georgelondon — Wed, 28 Jan 2009 03:23:01 +0000

Great! I liked the idea. And the approach… felt almost like those sidebars on the news websites with all the quotes. Voices were clear and distinct. Flow was good. Finished when it should have!

By: Andrew Cheverton

Andrew Cheverton — Tue, 27 Jan 2009 17:24:35 +0000

The round table style works really well here.

By: davidbaillie

davidbaillie — Sat, 24 Jan 2009 13:47:19 +0000

Matthew – thanks very much for the typo headsup. Absolutely the sort of thing I need!

Thanks for all the comments. Those and coffee are all that’s keeping me going today!

By: Rol

Rol — Sat, 24 Jan 2009 10:16:35 +0000

Great stuff, David. One of those stories I could easily have read a lot more of.

By: Suzi Rose

Suzi Rose — Fri, 23 Jan 2009 18:05:09 +0000

I really like this, you’ve captured all the different voices really well.

By: Matthew Sonter

Matthew Sonter — Fri, 23 Jan 2009 13:54:55 +0000

Hey David, this is great! Real documentary-like feel to it, and I thought you did the different character voices well, like the 6 year old kid and the bass player.

Yes, and the line “I mean we had a business plan.” The cuts to the next speaker were really well-timed and well-done I thought.

Really cool direction to move in from the picture too. I dug this one big time :)

P.S. you’ve got a small typo with ‘ago’…can we point those out here?