Background Levels

Contributed by Matthew Hartwell on 21/01/09

It feels like a Sunday afternoon drive through Pripyat.

The radio is silent as we come through the tunnel. Daylight fills our eyes as we approach the mouth, and it’s like opening a present. The city just appears before us, nestled in the valley.

The three rivers are still flowing.

It’s daytime, so it’s not immediately obvious, but the electricity’s out. My driver stops at a red light, at a light, anyway, unsure of what to do. He edges forward tentatively.

“I guess you treat it like a stop sign,” I tell him. He nods and we move carefully through the intersection, weaving around what’s left.

“Roll down the windows,” I say. He hesitates, but that’s why we’re here.

It’s quiet, sure, but not too quiet. It would be alright if it was too quiet. It’s half-measures. No engines, but a guy yells. No brakes or beeps, but conversations play out on the sidewalk.

There’s no hard edge, the loop doesn’t dip, it just crossfades into itself and starts from the beginning.

I pull the microphone out of my bag, and hook it up to the deck.

The needles jump when I plug it in, and then drop back to baseline. When my driver speaks, I’m more startled by the levels than the sound.

“Anything, boss?” He looks genuinely interested. I shake my head.

“Mic might be dead,” I say, and reach into my bag and pull out another. I attach the cable and aim it out the window towards the voices.

“-eally think he’s cheating on you, you should try to catch him.” The first voice is a woman’s.

The second voice, also a woman’s, replies, “I think I should just talk to him about it. He’d come clean if I confronted him. It might be nothing.”

“I’m just telling you, when I was with Andy, I thought he was going out to the bar on game nights to drink with his friends untireally think he’s cheating on you, you should try to catch him.”

It loops again. Thirteen seconds. I run the math in my head. I figure we’re about a mile and a quarter from ground zero.

We drive on, through the Strip and into Lawrenceville. I want to check in the studio, see if anybody had been playing. The door’s locked from the inside, like most of them are, and I feel like an idiot as I knock and wait like so many times before. The driver approaches and takes out his tools. He disassembles the door, and I help him set it down on the sidewalk.

There’s no electricity, but I can hear music playing. He must have been recording, maybe practicing when it happened. I grab the mic kit and head inside.

I connect and reconnect the cables. No green lights. No needles move. I’m not a scientist, I don’t know why. We can hear it, my driver hums the tune. I throw the deck at the wall and it shatters. We’re farther out, here. It loops for about a minute forty-two. Almost the whole song. It’s new. Wasn’t on any of his albums.

Nobody knew it was going to have this effect. Everybody assumes, you drop a neutron bomb, it clears out the people, instant occupation, just add new civilians and soldiers. Who could have expected this?

The driver and I sit and listen. A concert, just for us.

Hiroshima music.

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9 comments so far

  1. Wow, tricky one! :) I like the details about the souunds that are or aren’t audible, and the bit about treating the lights as a stop sign.

    A question, about the line ‘The door’s locked from the inside, like most of them are, and I feel like an idiot as I knock and wait like so many times before’. So can we say that the narrator and his driver also on a (much longer) time loop? Perhaps I guess it’s not necessary for them to be, but would be a nice extra.

    And why is the musician important?

    I guess the fact I’m asking these questions indicate that you’ve written a good piece of flash fiction, Matt. :-)

    Oh, and having the duration of the time loop affected by how far people are from the blast is a great idea.

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  2. I love love love this idea that the dead leave behind echos and imprints of themselves. I mean, really. I think this might be an idea worthy of a return at a later date. I want to know more about what it is to be the survivor who is left with these imprints.

    I love the moment of emerging from the tunnel, and the line, “The three rivers are still flowing.”

    Good work on the pacing. The flow felt just about right. The last sentence felt like a punchline to me, which is probably not what you’re going for.

    The mentions of Pripyat and Hiroshima and Lawrenceville left me a little confused as to time and place, even though intellectually I knew what you were going for – but only after I thought about it. If you decide to revisit this idea, consider mentioning those other cities in a more specific context. Maybe our Fearless Narrator has visited Pripyat and experienced this phenomena before? I don’t know. Something.

    Great good work as always.

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    Oddly, the only actual geographic mention was Lawrenceville, the others being metaphorical. And to pick Lawrenceville was purposefully vague, since it’s just a neighborhood in Pittsburgh, and I figure many cities have similar sounding areas.

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  3. Wow Matt – this was great. Brilliant idea.

    Wish I’d had it!

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  4. Brilliant! Twould make a great longer piece too.

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  5. Seriously scary.

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  6. Like it – a nice, big ghost story.

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  7. Great idea, well paced and delivered. Loved loved loved this.
    :-)

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  8. Oh wow, dude. That’s incredibly inventive and just… beautifully written. Despite the oddness of the setting, it’s easy to relate to – I’ve been a little preoccupied with abandoned spaces recently, for some reason.

    It felt Noonian – the more evocative, less chemical Noon of “Falling Out Of Cars”.

    The only thing that stops it being totally perfect for me is the reveal at the end – for some reason, that it’s something we’ve got science for took me out of it a little bit.

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