Comments on: Long-Sigh Anxiety

By: Cyn

Cyn — Thu, 13 Nov 2008 01:04:05 +0000

I like this a lot – it reminds me of Bringing Out The Dead.

8/10 on the narrator’s voice. I think it slips a little here and there. But so solidly established that I never lost the feel for him.

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By: Nicolas Papaconstantinou

Nicolas Papaconstantinou — Fri, 24 Oct 2008 10:59:22 +0000

Oh, I should also say that I love the pun in the title…

By: Nicolas Papaconstantinou

Nicolas Papaconstantinou — Fri, 24 Oct 2008 10:28:26 +0000

There’s a couple of really cool ideas and some nice flourishes in here.

Not sure if I’m just being a bit brain-dead at the moment, though, but the writing doesn’t seem as clear as I’m used to from you. The themes/narrative are a tiny bit jumbled, and there are a couple of sentences in there that might need another pass to make them parse a little easier.

By: Nikki

Nikki — Thu, 23 Oct 2008 17:11:24 +0000

Even when anxious, you are still poetic…

By: zackprice

zackprice — Thu, 23 Oct 2008 15:32:57 +0000

very interesting. good work!